Commentary Writing #1
School districts around the world have been thinking about extending the school year, so that it is all year long will more little breaks. I do not think that school should be extended through the whole year. Many teenagers get very stressed throughout the whole school year and they need a break from school.
The school year takes up about 10 months of the 12 month year. If we expanded it to a 12 month year; then the teachers would have to get paid for that long.
Teachers get their money from the taxpayers. Our taxes would then skyrocket if we had to be able to pay the teachers all year for working. Teachers would make about 25% more if we had school during the summer too.
When kids end their school year they are excited to see where summer break will take them. For some students the want for summer keeps them going. If we eliminated summer which encourages them to keep going; then many kids will stop trying as hard as they do because there is nothing to look forward to.
Many people think that if we had year round school it would improve their child’s academic achievement, but that is the opposite of what will happen. The students will definitely not forget what they learned that year because it never ends, but they will academically burn out from the never ending school days.
During the summer children get to go to places and experience things that they usually wouldn’t during the school year. I do know that there are more frequent smaller breaks for year long school, but kids are still going to be forced to go to school during the summer when they would rather be swimming or spending time with friends and family.
Also it is a proven fact during that during summer students tend to forget what they learned over the school year. At the start of every school year there is about a month of reteaching the children what they already knew. If the heads of education had a problem with that they would have done something with the school systems by now.
School could have always been all year round, but the heads of education at the time came together and had three main reasons for having a summer vacation. The three reasons are that some schools don’t have air conditioning, students would need to help their families by farming over the summer, and the tourism places will lose major profits.
Many businesses make a lot of money during the summer because everyone is off, and because there are summer jobs that teens can take to help out a work place. If we took away summer; then teens wouldn’t get the training that they would need to work at a workplace. These summer jobs help them get ready to work in a successful job one day.
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Good job coming up with ideas for your reason! I believe there were some grammar issues and some of the sentences are confusing. I think more research and facts would make this piece stronger.
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